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embedded comments [in bold and in brackets] within your essay. Thank you for choosing

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Hello, Sharada! My name is Marie, and I look forward to working with you on this Essay Center

Review to improve your writing today. Let's get started!

*Writing Strength: 

Have a look at these sentences from your paper:

Chronic mental illness may be extremely difficult for family units to handle given the adverse

social stigmas, which exist regarding the disease in most communities across the globe today.

Chronic severe mental illness in family members could result in almost constant monitoring

and care, depending on the intensity and the illness.

Your introduction provides the necessary background information that your reader needs to know

about your topic. The introduction does its function to set the stage for your essay. Keep up the good

work, Sharada!

Main Idea/Thesis 

Making sure that the thesis carries the overall idea of your literature review on chronic mental

illnesses will give you a good thesis. Remember that the thesis has to present a 1-2 sentences

summary of your work. Look at your current thesis below:

Most of the literature that surrounds mental illnesses in the families is psychology based. In

addition, there is a resilient need for communication-based explorations to better comprehend

such families.

This thesis is telling that most of the literature is psychology-based, and what is needed to understand

the topic. It doesn’t really tell what your sources revolve on, Sharada. Remember that a literature

review is organized based on the ideas from the sources and not the sources themselves. Since the

thesis needs to express clearly what the paper is about, you need to make sure that it carries the

central idea of your sources. What is the theme about chronic mental illnesses that you want to focus

on in this literature review? What are issues that connect the ideas of your sources together? What

particular perspective on the materials would you like to present in your review? For instance, here’s a

sample thesis below:

Recent studies about bigamy show that people are starting to accept this phenomenon as a

subject worthy of academic consideration.